Halcyon Yomi's Arsenal

Name: Superior Pressure Strike
Rank: C
Power: C
Activation Cost: 5
Upkeep Cost: -
Range: Self
Speed: -
Element: -
Skill: Ijutsu
Classification: Personal
Requirements: Intelligence B rank
Parent Technique: Pressure Strike
Hand Seals: -
Description: Just as with the regular Pressure Strike Technique, the user presses their thumbs upon the nodes of chakra near the muscles where they want to strengthen their chakra flow through. By pressuring these points/nodes, the user can greatly enhance the capacity an effectiveness of their muscles. This technique increases either speed, strength or constitution for two posts with ++.

This technique can be used three times consecutively in one post.

Weaknesses: -

Edited the technique so that it only has ++ rather than a full tier, making the max boost 2 tiers and removing the weakness in the process since the weakness was only there to compensate for the big boost and to make it "weaker" than stuff like eight gates, etc...

Alright, after discussing it with staff and coming to a consensus, you're going to have to have a drawback to get what is essentially a potential S rank boost for one rank lower chakra cost. So, if you add a weakness that has you take one minus of temporary damage to a stat boosted above one tier in the form of muscle exhaustion for two posts after the technique ends, this should be good to go. Do also note that you can't utilize it in the same location until this debuff is done. You'd still be able to boost a completely separate part of your body if you wished.

Name: Superior Pressure Strike
Rank: C
Power: C
Activation Cost: 11
Upkeep Cost: -
Range: Self
Speed: -
Element: -
Skill: Ijutsu
Classification: Personal
Requirements: Intelligence B rank
Parent Technique: Pressure Strike
Hand Seals: -
Description: Just as with the regular Pressure Strike Technique, the user presses their thumbs upon the nodes of chakra near the muscles where they want to strengthen their chakra flow through. By pressuring these points/nodes, the user can greatly enhance the capacity an effectiveness of their muscles. This technique increases either speed, strength or constitution for two posts with ++.

This technique can be used three times consecutively in one post.

Weaknesses: -

Edited the technique so that it drains 11 chakra per use

Halcyon Yomi wrote:Name: Superior Pressure Strike
Rank: C
Power: C
Activation Cost: 11
Upkeep Cost: -
Range: Self
Speed: -
Element: -
Skill: Ijutsu
Classification: Personal
Requirements: Intelligence B rank
Parent Technique: Pressure Strike
Hand Seals: -
Description: Just as with the regular Pressure Strike Technique, the user presses their thumbs upon the nodes of chakra near the muscles where they want to strengthen their chakra flow through. By pressuring these points/nodes, the user can greatly enhance the capacity an effectiveness of their muscles. This technique increases either speed, strength or constitution for two posts with ++.

This technique can be used three times consecutively in one post.

Weaknesses: -

Edited the technique so that it drains 11 chakra per use

Approved

Name: Jigoku no Ken - Crashing Chrysantemum
Rank: B
Power: A
Activation Cost: 15
Upkeep Cost: -
Range: 15m
Speed: A
Element: -
Skill: Taijutsu/Ijutsu
Classification: Secret
Requirements: Must know Pressure Strike
Parent Technique: Jigoku no Ken-Style
Hand Seals: -
Description:
To utilyze this technique, the user must have Jigoku no Ken style active and must also be in the active period of either pressure strike or superior pressure strike. By channeling their chakra through their feet, the user can swiftly launch themselves at amazing speed in linear fashion with a max range of 15m towards a possible enemy or opponent, at which point the user smashes both hands in the usual open palm Chrysantemum stance against either a person, barrier or defensive technique.

This technique then sends out a strong shockwave, strong enough to rupture internals and crack bone. This technique can pass through any armor up to B rank, with armors of D rank and lower being completely destroyed by it. It can also crack and destroy any C rank or lower barriers [due to barriers being distinctively better than most regular defensive techniques, these do stop the shockwave coming after the initial crash] and pass through any defensive technique of C rank or lower.

Weaknesses: If this technique is used more than once during the active period of Pressure Strike and/or Superior Pressure strike, the user will lose 1 tier in speed, strength and constitution for two posts after pressure strike and/or superior pressure strike's active period ends.

Name: Jigoku no Ken - Hyacinth
Rank: D
Power: D
Activation Cost: 3
Upkeep Cost: -
Range: -
Speed: -
Element: -
Skill: Taijutsu/Ijutsu
Classification: secret
Requirements: -
Parent Technique: Jigoku no Ken
Hand Seals: -
Description:
Must have Jigoku no Ken active to use this technique. The user uses an adapted form of the tigerclaw, yet rather than curling their fingers, they stretch them as if holding a sake cup. With a swift and precise strike, this technique can be used in two ways: to break through an opponent's guard in similar fashion as with a palm strike or to disrupt a ninjutsu technique of D rank or lower used by the opponent on touch. During the strike, the user's strength temporarily raises by 1 tier.

Weaknesses: This technique does not prevent burns, electrocution or other secondary effects when used defensive.

Name: Jigoku no Ken - Hyacinth Barrage
Rank: C
Power: C
Activation Cost: 5
Upkeep Cost: 3
Range: self
Speed: -
Element: -
Skill: Taijutsu/Ijutsu
Classification: Secret
Requirements: C rank coordination
Parent Technique: Jigoku no Ken - Hyacinth
Hand Seals: -
Description:
Must have Jigoku no Ken active to use this technique. The user uses an adapted form of the tigerclaw, yet rather than curling their fingers, they stretch them as if holding a sake cup. In this case, the user sends out a flurry of Hyacinth strikes (up to maximum five per post), this technique can break an opponent's guard or disperse a C rank or lower ninjutsu technique on touch (can only be done once per post). During the strikes of this technique, the user's strength temporarily raises by 1 tier.

Weaknesses: This technique does not prevent burns, electrocution or other secondary effects when used defensive.

Name: Jigoku no Ken - Enlightened Mastery
Rank: E
Power: -
Activation Cost: -
Upkeep Cost: 1
Range: self
Speed: -
Element: -
Skill: Taijutsu/Ijutsu
Classification: Secret
Requirements: B Rank Intelligence, B rank Coordination, A class status.
Parent Technique: Jigoku no Ken
Hand Seals: -
Description:
As a user of the Jigoku no Ken style knows well after mastery of said style, no technique is better than the person using it and no person is better than the technique they have mastered. It is the respect for this style that allows one to unlock their body's innate potential and master it as they would a mere tool. When the User of this technique has progressed to A class, they can pay 1000 experience to obtain this technique.

While using Jigoku no Ken - Enlightened Breathing, it effectively acts as if it were Jigoku no Ken itself, but it grants no bonus in strength or coordination.
Weaknesses: -

Name: Water Cloak armor
Rank: C
Power: -
Activation Cost: 5
Upkeep Cost: -
Range: self
Speed: -
Element: Suiton
Skill: Ninjutsu
Classification: Open
Requirements: -
Parent Technique: -
Hand Seals: Rat-ox-dog
Description:
After the user forms the handseals rat-ox-dog, they expell a small amount of chakra which will act as a coating of water over their torso (also over any armor they'd already be wearing). If the user is not wearing any armor, it will temporarily grant a boost of 1 tier to their constitution for two posts. If the user is wearing armor, instead it will act as if the armor itself is of one rank higher build quality for the next two posts.

Weaknesses: As it is a suiton element technique, when this coating of water is in place, any raiton element technique now has a 100% chance of leaving severe burns whenever they hit due to electrocution.

Halcyon Yomi wrote:Name: Jigoku no Ken - Crashing Chrysantemum
Rank: B
Power: A
Activation Cost: 15
Upkeep Cost: -
Range: 15m
Speed: A
Element: -
Skill: Taijutsu/Ijutsu
Classification: Secret
Requirements: Must know Pressure Strike
Parent Technique: Jigoku no Ken-Style
Hand Seals: -
Description:
To utilyze this technique, the user must have Jigoku no Ken style active and must also be in the active period of either pressure strike or superior pressure strike. By channeling their chakra through their feet, the user can swiftly launch themselves at amazing speed in linear fashion with a max range of 15m towards a possible enemy or opponent, at which point the user smashes both hands in the usual open palm Chrysantemum stance against either a person, barrier or defensive technique.

This technique then sends out a strong shockwave, strong enough to rupture internals and crack bone. This technique can pass through any armor up to B rank, with armors of D rank and lower being completely destroyed by it. It can also crack and destroy any C rank or lower barriers [due to barriers being distinctively better than most regular defensive techniques, these do stop the shockwave coming after the initial crash] and pass through any defensive technique of C rank or lower.

Weaknesses: If this technique is used more than once during the active period of Pressure Strike and/or Superior Pressure strike, the user will lose 1 tier in speed, strength and constitution for two posts after pressure strike and/or superior pressure strike's active period ends.

Approved

Halcyon Yomi wrote:

Name: Jigoku no Ken - Hyacinth
Rank: D
Power: D
Activation Cost: 3
Upkeep Cost: -
Range: -
Speed: -
Element: -
Skill: Taijutsu/Ijutsu
Classification: secret
Requirements: -
Parent Technique: Jigoku no Ken
Hand Seals: -
Description:
Must have Jigoku no Ken active to use this technique. The user uses an adapted form of the tigerclaw, yet rather than curling their fingers, they stretch them as if holding a sake cup. With a swift and precise strike, this technique can be used in two ways: to break through an opponent's guard in similar fashion as with a palm strike or to disrupt a ninjutsu technique of D rank or lower used by the opponent on touch. During the strike, the user's strength temporarily raises by 1 tier.

Weaknesses: This technique does not prevent burns, electrocution or other secondary effects when used defensive.

If you are raising strength by a tier it needs to cost more chakra.

Halcyon Yomi wrote:
Name: Jigoku no Ken - Hyacinth Barrage
Rank: C
Power: C
Activation Cost: 5
Upkeep Cost: 3
Range: self
Speed: -
Element: -
Skill: Taijutsu/Ijutsu
Classification: Secret
Requirements: C rank coordination
Parent Technique: Jigoku no Ken - Hyacinth
Hand Seals: -
Description:
Must have Jigoku no Ken active to use this technique. The user uses an adapted form of the tigerclaw, yet rather than curling their fingers, they stretch them as if holding a sake cup. In this case, the user sends out a flurry of Hyacinth strikes (up to maximum five per post), this technique can break an opponent's guard or disperse a C rank or lower ninjutsu technique on touch (can only be done once per post). During the strikes of this technique, the user's strength temporarily raises by 1 tier.

Weaknesses: This technique does not prevent burns, electrocution or other secondary effects when used defensive.

Approved.

Halcyon Yomi wrote:
Name: Jigoku no Ken - Enlightened Mastery
Rank: E
Power: -
Activation Cost: -
Upkeep Cost: 1
Range: self
Speed: -
Element: -
Skill: Taijutsu/Ijutsu
Classification: Secret
Requirements: B Rank Intelligence, B rank Coordination, A class status.
Parent Technique: Jigoku no Ken
Hand Seals: -
Description:
As a user of the Jigoku no Ken style knows well after mastery of said style, no technique is better than the person using it and no person is better than the technique they have mastered. It is the respect for this style that allows one to unlock their body's innate potential and master it as they would a mere tool. When the User of this technique has progressed to A class, they can pay 1000 experience to obtain this technique.

While using Jigoku no Ken - Enlightened Breathing, it effectively acts as if it were Jigoku no Ken itself, but it grants no bonus in strength or coordination.
Weaknesses: -

Denied as this is just a way to access the same fighting style for a fraction of the cost.

Halcyon Yomi wrote:

Name: Water Cloak armor
Rank: C
Power: -
Activation Cost: 5
Upkeep Cost: -
Range: self
Speed: -
Element: Suiton
Skill: Ninjutsu
Classification: Open
Requirements: -
Parent Technique: -
Hand Seals: Rat-ox-dog
Description:
After the user forms the handseals rat-ox-dog, they expell a small amount of chakra which will act as a coating of water over their torso (also over any armor they'd already be wearing). If the user is not wearing any armor, it will temporarily grant a boost of 1 tier to their constitution for two posts. If the user is wearing armor, instead it will act as if the armor itself is of one rank higher build quality for the next two posts.

Weaknesses: As it is a suiton element technique, when this coating of water is in place, any raiton element technique now has a 100% chance of leaving severe burns whenever they hit due to electrocution.

Cap the boost at B Rank Con and/or B Rank for the armour.

Name: Jigoku no Ken - Hyacinth
Rank: D
Power: D
Activation Cost: 3
Upkeep Cost: -
Range: -
Speed: -
Element: -
Skill: Taijutsu/Ijutsu
Classification: secret
Requirements: -
Parent Technique: Jigoku no Ken
Hand Seals: -
Description:
Must have Jigoku no Ken active to use this technique. The user uses an adapted form of the tigerclaw, yet rather than curling their fingers, they stretch them as if holding a sake cup. With a swift and precise strike, this technique can be used in two ways: to break through an opponent's guard in similar fashion as with a palm strike or to disrupt a ninjutsu technique of D rank or lower used by the opponent on touch. During the strike, the user's strength temporarily raises by ++

Weaknesses: This technique does not prevent burns, electrocution or other secondary effects when used defensive.

Edits made: Lowered the boost from full rank to ++

Name: Jigoku no Ken - Enlightened Mastery
Rank: B
Power: -
Activation Cost: -
Upkeep Cost: 10
Range: self
Speed: -
Element: -
Skill: Taijutsu/Ijutsu
Classification: Unique
Requirements: B Rank Intelligence, B rank Coordination, A class status.
Parent Technique: Jigoku no Ken
Hand Seals: -
Description:
As a user of the Jigoku no Ken style knows well after mastery of said style, no technique is better than the person using it and no person is better than the technique they have mastered. It is the respect for this style that allows one to unlock their body's innate potential and master it as they would a mere tool. When the User of this technique has progressed to A class, they can pay 1000 experience to obtain this technique.

Jigoku no Ken-Enlightened Mastery effectively replaces the regular Jigoku no ken, granting a bonus of +1 to coordination and strength and retaining the effect of whenever the user hits a bodypart of an opponent twice while using this technique, said bodypart will be paralyzed for one post.
Weaknesses: -

Name: Water Cloak armor
Rank: C
Power: -
Activation Cost: 5
Upkeep Cost: -
Range: self
Speed: -
Element: Suiton
Skill: Ninjutsu
Classification: Open
Requirements: -
Parent Technique: -
Hand Seals: Rat-ox-dog
Description:
After the user forms the handseals rat-ox-dog, they expell a small amount of chakra which will act as a coating of water over their torso (also over any armor they'd already be wearing). If the user is not wearing any armor, it will temporarily grant a boost of 1 tier their constitution or grant an extra rank of quality to the worn armor of the user to a maximum in constitution and armor quality of B rank.

Weaknesses: As it is a suiton element technique, when this coating of water is in place, any raiton element technique now has a 100% chance of leaving severe burns whenever they hit due to electrocution.

Edits made: rephrased the bonus, added the max B rank clausule.

Halcyon Yomi wrote:Name: Jigoku no Ken - Hyacinth
Rank: D
Power: D
Activation Cost: 3
Upkeep Cost: -
Range: -
Speed: -
Element: -
Skill: Taijutsu/Ijutsu
Classification: secret
Requirements: -
Parent Technique: Jigoku no Ken
Hand Seals: -
Description:
Must have Jigoku no Ken active to use this technique. The user uses an adapted form of the tigerclaw, yet rather than curling their fingers, they stretch them as if holding a sake cup. With a swift and precise strike, this technique can be used in two ways: to break through an opponent's guard in similar fashion as with a palm strike or to disrupt a ninjutsu technique of D rank or lower used by the opponent on touch. During the strike, the user's strength temporarily raises by ++

Weaknesses: This technique does not prevent burns, electrocution or other secondary effects when used defensive.

Edits made: Lowered the boost from full rank to ++

Name: Jigoku no Ken - Enlightened Mastery
Rank: B
Power: -
Activation Cost: -
Upkeep Cost: 10
Range: self
Speed: -
Element: -
Skill: Taijutsu/Ijutsu
Classification: Unique
Requirements: B Rank Intelligence, B rank Coordination, A class status.
Parent Technique: Jigoku no Ken
Hand Seals: -
Description:
As a user of the Jigoku no Ken style knows well after mastery of said style, no technique is better than the person using it and no person is better than the technique they have mastered. It is the respect for this style that allows one to unlock their body's innate potential and master it as they would a mere tool. When the User of this technique has progressed to A class, they can pay 1000 experience to obtain this technique.

Jigoku no Ken-Enlightened Mastery effectively replaces the regular Jigoku no ken, granting a bonus of +1 to coordination and strength and retaining the effect of whenever the user hits a bodypart of an opponent twice while using this technique, said bodypart will be paralyzed for one post.
Weaknesses: -

Name: Water Cloak armor
Rank: C
Power: -
Activation Cost: 5
Upkeep Cost: -
Range: self
Speed: -
Element: Suiton
Skill: Ninjutsu
Classification: Open
Requirements: -
Parent Technique: -
Hand Seals: Rat-ox-dog
Description:
After the user forms the handseals rat-ox-dog, they expell a small amount of chakra which will act as a coating of water over their torso (also over any armor they'd already be wearing). If the user is not wearing any armor, it will temporarily grant a boost of 1 tier their constitution or grant an extra rank of quality to the worn armor of the user to a maximum in constitution and armor quality of B rank.

Weaknesses: As it is a suiton element technique, when this coating of water is in place, any raiton element technique now has a 100% chance of leaving severe burns whenever they hit due to electrocution.

Edits made: rephrased the bonus, added the max B rank clausule.

Approved

Name: Jigoku no Ken - Rose
Rank: D
Power: D
Activation Cost: 1
Upkeep Cost: -
Range: 1-3 meters
Speed: -
Element: -
Skill: Taijutsu
Classification: Personal
Requirements: -
Parent Technique: Jigoku no Ken
Hand Seals: -
Description:
The user jumps from a standstill position to deliver a high jump kick towards the opponent, which at the point of impact will boost the user's strength with +
Weaknesses: -


Name: Jigoku no Ken - Rose Thorn
Rank: C
Power: C
Activation Cost: 3
Upkeep Cost: -
Range: -
Speed: -
Element: -
Skill: Taijutsu
Classification: Personal
Requirements: Jigoku no Ken - Rose and Rising Drop Kick
Parent Technique: Jigoku no Ken
Hand Seals: -
Description:
Jigoku no Ken - Rose Thorn can only be used when the opponent has decided to block the high jump kick from Jigoku no Ken - Rose, in which case the user will surprise the opponent by dropping down their other foot onto the blocking opponent. This technique can break through enemy defenses and during the impact of this technique, the user's strength is raised by 1 tier.
Weaknesses: -


Name: Jigoku no Ken - Rosebud
Rank: C
Power: C
Activation Cost: 3
Upkeep Cost:
Range: -
Speed: -
Element: -
Skill: Taijutsu
Classification: Personal
Requirements: -
Parent Technique: Jigoku no Ken
Hand Seals: -
Description:
Though Jigoku no Ken heavily emphasizes punches, jabs and palm strikes, the style does not completely forget the use of kicks. While using this technique, the user flexes the muscles in their legs, allowing them to gain +1 tier of speed for two posts whenever using a technique which emphasizes the use of the legs or simply basic kicking. (meaning the bonus won't count when using any technique that delivers a punch, etc)
Weaknesses: -

Halcyon Yomi wrote:Name: Jigoku no Ken - Rose
Rank: D
Power: D
Activation Cost: 1
Upkeep Cost: -
Range: 1-3 meters
Speed: -
Element: -
Skill: Taijutsu
Classification: Personal
Requirements: -
Parent Technique: Jigoku no Ken
Hand Seals: -
Description:
The user jumps from a standstill position to deliver a high jump kick towards the opponent, which at the point of impact will boost the user's strength with +
Weaknesses: -

As a D-rank this can afford to yield a total of two +'s.

Name: Jigoku no Ken - Rose Thorn
Rank: C
Power: C
Activation Cost: 3
Upkeep Cost: -
Range: -
Speed: -
Element: -
Skill: Taijutsu
Classification: Personal
Requirements: Jigoku no Ken - Rose and Rising Drop Kick
Parent Technique: Jigoku no Ken
Hand Seals: -
Description:
Jigoku no Ken - Rose Thorn can only be used when the opponent has decided to block the high jump kick from Jigoku no Ken - Rose, in which case the user will surprise the opponent by dropping down their other foot onto the blocking opponent. This technique can break through enemy defenses and during the impact of this technique, the user's strength is raised by 1 tier.
Weaknesses: -

Approved

Name: Jigoku no Ken - Rosebud
Rank: C
Power: C
Activation Cost: 3
Upkeep Cost:
Range: -
Speed: -
Element: -
Skill: Taijutsu
Classification: Personal
Requirements: -
Parent Technique: Jigoku no Ken
Hand Seals: -
Description:
Though Jigoku no Ken heavily emphasizes punches, jabs and palm strikes, the style does not completely forget the use of kicks. While using this technique, the user flexes the muscles in their legs, allowing them to gain +1 tier of speed for two posts whenever using a technique which emphasizes the use of the legs or simply basic kicking. (meaning the bonus won't count when using any technique that delivers a punch, etc)
Weaknesses: -

If you want a +1 tier speed boost for two posts with the cost of one activation you would need a weakness. One I can immediately think of is a one-post cooldown where you suffer -1 tier of Speed. Either that, or you can give it an upkeep.

Name: Jigoku no Ken - Rose
Rank: D
Power: D
Activation Cost: 1
Upkeep Cost: -
Range: 1-3 meters
Speed: -
Element: -
Skill: Taijutsu
Classification: Personal
Requirements: -
Parent Technique: Jigoku no Ken
Hand Seals: -
Description:
The user jumps from a standstill position to deliver a high jump kick towards the opponent, which at the point of impact will boost the user's strength with ++
Weaknesses: -

Edits: as suggested, changed bonus to ++

Name: Jigoku no Ken - Rosebud
Rank: C
Power: C
Activation Cost: 3
Upkeep Cost: 3
Range: -
Speed: -
Element: -
Skill: Taijutsu
Classification: Personal
Requirements: -
Parent Technique: Jigoku no Ken
Hand Seals: -
Description:
Though Jigoku no Ken heavily emphasizes punches, jabs and palm strikes, the style does not completely forget the use of kicks. While using this technique, the user flexes the muscles in their legs, allowing them to gain +1 tier of speed whenever using a technique which emphasizes the use of the legs or simply basic kicking. (meaning the bonus won't count when using any technique that delivers a punch, etc)
Weaknesses: Can only be used on Kicking techniques.

Edits: changed this to a maintainable technique, original weakness now also stressed at in weakness section.

Name: Flash Step
Rank: C
Power: -
Activation Cost: 3
Upkeep Cost: 3
Range: self
Speed: -
Element: -
Skill: Taijutsu
Classification: Personal - Kirigakure Exclusive
Requirements: Speed rank C
Parent Technique: supernatural walking technique
Hand Seals: Tiger-Ram
Description:
After the user has made the Tiger and Ram handseal, the user's feet will be coated with a thick layer of chakra, allowing for the user's walking and running to be silent and soundless for anyone with perception C or lower. This can be maintained for up to a maximum of 3 posts.
Weaknesses: When using this technique, the user is unable to use Supernatural walking.

Name: Rose Bloom
Rank: C
Power: C
Activation Cost: 3
Upkeep Cost: 3
Range: self
Speed: C
Element: -
Skill: Taijutsu/Ijutsu
Classification: Personal
Requirements: -
Parent Technique: Jigoku no Ken
Hand Seals: -
Description:
*Must have Jigoku no Ken - Rosebud active to use this technique

While the Rosebud technique flexes the muscles in the user's legs to allow for better flexibility and speed, the Rose Bloom technique allows for the muscles to be strengthened considerably, granting a boost of +1 tier to strength whenever using a kicking technique.
Weaknesses: Boost only works with kicking techniques and when Jigoku no ken - Rosebud is active.

Name: Liquid Venom shot
Rank: C
Power: D
Activation Cost: 5
Upkeep Cost: -
Range: 25 meters
Speed: B
Element: Suiton
Skill: Ninjutsu
Classification: Personal
Requirements: Must have at least one dosage of Liquid poison in inventory to be used.
Parent Technique: Water shot
Hand Seals: Ram-ox-dog
Description:
The user makes the handseals to accumulate chakra into their mouth and have to take a liquid poison and put it in their mouth, allowing for the chakra to effectively surround it and prevent it from poisoning the user, after which the user must press their belly to shoot out the poison in the form of a small globule not bigger than half an inch in diameter. When this would hit an opponent, it will not cause much damage, as the main focus is to inject the poison and let that do its work.
Weaknesses: Any armor of D grade or higher can succesfully prevent penetration by this technique.

Halcyon Yomi wrote:Name: Jigoku no Ken - Rose
Rank: D
Power: D
Activation Cost: 1
Upkeep Cost: -
Range: 1-3 meters
Speed: -
Element: -
Skill: Taijutsu
Classification: Personal
Requirements: -
Parent Technique: Jigoku no Ken
Hand Seals: -
Description:
The user jumps from a standstill position to deliver a high jump kick towards the opponent, which at the point of impact will boost the user's strength with ++
Weaknesses: -

Edits: as suggested, changed bonus to ++

Approved

Name: Jigoku no Ken - Rosebud
Rank: C
Power: C
Activation Cost: 3
Upkeep Cost: 3
Range: -
Speed: -
Element: -
Skill: Taijutsu
Classification: Personal
Requirements: -
Parent Technique: Jigoku no Ken
Hand Seals: -
Description:
Though Jigoku no Ken heavily emphasizes punches, jabs and palm strikes, the style does not completely forget the use of kicks. While using this technique, the user flexes the muscles in their legs, allowing them to gain +1 tier of speed whenever using a technique which emphasizes the use of the legs or simply basic kicking. (meaning the bonus won't count when using any technique that delivers a punch, etc)
Weaknesses: Can only be used on Kicking techniques.

Edits: changed this to a maintainable technique, original weakness now also stressed at in weakness section.

Approved

Name: Flash Step
Rank: C
Power: -
Activation Cost: 3
Upkeep Cost: 3
Range: self
Speed: -
Element: -
Skill: Taijutsu
Classification: Personal - Kirigakure Exclusive
Requirements: Speed rank C
Parent Technique: supernatural walking technique
Hand Seals: Tiger-Ram
Description:
After the user has made the Tiger and Ram handseal, the user's feet will be coated with a thick layer of chakra, allowing for the user's walking and running to be silent and soundless for anyone with perception C or lower. This can be maintained for up to a maximum of 3 posts.
Weaknesses: When using this technique, the user is unable to use Supernatural walking.

Currently under discussion

Name: Rose Bloom
Rank: C
Power: C
Activation Cost: 3
Upkeep Cost: 3
Range: self
Speed: C
Element: -
Skill: Taijutsu/Ijutsu
Classification: Personal
Requirements: -
Parent Technique: Jigoku no Ken
Hand Seals: -
Description:
*Must have Jigoku no Ken - Rosebud active to use this technique

While the Rosebud technique flexes the muscles in the user's legs to allow for better flexibility and speed, the Rose Bloom technique allows for the muscles to be strengthened considerably, granting a boost of +1 tier to strength whenever using a kicking technique.
Weaknesses: Boost only works with kicking techniques and when Jigoku no ken - Rosebud is active.

This technique cannot be used in conjunction with Rosebud. The technique Rosebud alone already grants the user +1 tier in Speed when executing JnK kicking technique. Adding more boosts on top of it seems like an attempt to add more meaningless stacks to the existing style.

Name: Liquid Venom shot
Rank: C
Power: D
Activation Cost: 5
Upkeep Cost: -
Range: 25 meters
Speed: B
Element: Suiton
Skill: Ninjutsu
Classification: Personal
Requirements: Must have at least one dosage of Liquid poison in inventory to be used.
Parent Technique: Water shot
Hand Seals: Ram-ox-dog
Description:
The user makes the handseals to accumulate chakra into their mouth and have to take a liquid poison and put it in their mouth, allowing for the chakra to effectively surround it and prevent it from poisoning the user, after which the user must press their belly to shoot out the poison in the form of a small globule not bigger than half an inch in diameter. When this would hit an opponent, it will not cause much damage, as the main focus is to inject the poison and let that do its work.
Weaknesses: Any armor of D grade or higher can succesfully prevent penetration by this technique.

Approved

Name: Jigoku No Ken - Violet
Rank: D
Power: D
Activation Cost: 1
Upkeep Cost: -
Range: -
Speed: -
Element: -
Skill: Taijutsu|Ijutsu
Classification: Personal
Requirements: C rank Coordination
Parent Technique: Jigoku no Ken
Hand Seals: -
Description:
This technique is on first sight nothing more than a simple kick, however the user's leg will be coated by their own medically charged chakra, which when used on an opponent will effectively lower their constitution by - for two posts.
Weaknesses: -

Name: Jigoku no Ken - Violet Burst
Rank: C
Power: B
Activation Cost: 5
Upkeep Cost: -
Range: -
Speed: -
Element: -
Skill: Taijutsu|Ijutsu
Classification: personal
Requirements: C rank coordination, Jigoku no Ken -Violet
Parent Technique: Jigoku no Ken
Hand Seals: -
Description:
Just as with the regular Jigoku no Ken - Violet, this technique may look like nothing more than a swift hinge kick, the lower leg snapping towards the opponent three times at most. The used leg will be coated with medically charged chakra and when it hits the opponent it will lower their constitution by -- (this effect won't stack with multiple hits from this technique in a single post) for two posts.
Weaknesses: While using this technique, the user effectively has to balance onto their other leg, lowering their coordination by -- during the use of this technique.

Name: Jigoku no Ken - Violet Rage
Rank: B
Power: A
Activation Cost: 10
Upkeep Cost: -
Range: -
Speed: -
Element: -
Skill: Taijutsu|Ijutsu
Classification: Personal
Requirements: B rank coordination, Jigoku no Ken - Violet Burst
Parent Technique: Jigoku no Ken
Hand Seals: -
Description:
What may seem like an ordinary, yet quite powerful kick by the untrained eye, will reveal to be a dangerous weapon. When using this technique, the user's leg is coated with medically charged chakra, which practically poisons an opponent upone touch. When hit by this technique, the opponent will suffer from a -1 tier in constitution and due to this technique's power, if unguarded, they may end up with severe bruising or even fractured ( but not broken) bones.
Weaknesses: When performing this technique, the user will have a -- in coordination.

Name: Jigoku No Ken - Violet
Rank: D
Power: D
Activation Cost: 1
Upkeep Cost: -
Range: -
Speed: -
Element: -
Skill: Taijutsu|Ijutsu
Classification: Personal
Requirements: C rank Coordination
Parent Technique: Jigoku no Ken
Hand Seals: -
Description:
This technique is on first sight nothing more than a simple kick, however the user's leg will be coated by their own medically charged chakra, which when used on an opponent will effectively lower their constitution by - for two posts.
Weaknesses: -

How exactly does this lower ones constitution? Touching them with chakra isn't a very good descriptor. How long does this debuff last for? At D rank power, two posts sounds fair to me since there's no upkeep.

Name: Jigoku no Ken - Violet Burst
Rank: C
Power: B
Activation Cost: 5
Upkeep Cost: -
Range: -
Speed: -
Element: -
Skill: Taijutsu|Ijutsu
Classification: personal
Requirements: C rank coordination, Jigoku no Ken -Violet
Parent Technique: Jigoku no Ken
Hand Seals: -
Description:
Just as with the regular Jigoku no Ken - Violet, this technique may look like nothing more than a swift hinge kick, the lower leg snapping towards the opponent three times at most. The used leg will be coated with medically charged chakra and when it hits the opponent it will lower their constitution by -- (this effect won't stack with multiple hits from this technique in a single post) for two posts.
Weaknesses: While using this technique, the user effectively has to balance onto their other leg, lowering their coordination by -- during the use of this technique.

Same concern as the parent technique. Also, you won't need that drawback for Coordination. Your stamina cost covers the debuff cost. Needing Violet active shouldn't be a requirement either, this is a stronger version of it in a separate application. Only one can be active at a time.

Name: Jigoku no Ken - Violet Rage
Rank: B
Power: A
Activation Cost: 10
Upkeep Cost: -
Range: -
Speed: -
Element: -
Skill: Taijutsu|Ijutsu
Classification: Personal
Requirements: B rank coordination, Jigoku no Ken - Violet Burst
Parent Technique: Jigoku no Ken
Hand Seals: -
Description:
What may seem like an ordinary, yet quite powerful kick by the untrained eye, will reveal to be a dangerous weapon. When using this technique, the user's leg is coated with medically charged chakra, which practically poisons an opponent upone touch. When hit by this technique, the opponent will suffer from a -1 tier in constitution and due to this technique's power, if unguarded, they may end up with severe bruising or even fractured ( but not broken) bones.
Weaknesses: When performing this technique, the user will have a -- in coordination.

Every word of my comments from the previous two apply to this one as well.

As for this technique:

Name: Flash Step
Rank: C
Power: -
Activation Cost: 3
Upkeep Cost: 3
Range: self
Speed: -
Element: -
Skill: Taijutsu
Classification: Personal - Kirigakure Exclusive
Requirements: Speed rank C
Parent Technique: supernatural walking technique
Hand Seals: Tiger-Ram
Description:
After the user has made the Tiger and Ram handseal, the user's feet will be coated with a thick layer of chakra, allowing for the user's walking and running to be silent and soundless for anyone with perception C or lower. This can be maintained for up to a maximum of 3 posts.
Weaknesses: When using this technique, the user is unable to use Supernatural walking.

After being discussed this came out to be viewed as an almost bootlegged Silent Killing, thus being denied.

Currently dropping the jigoku no ken-Violet line until further notice...

Name: Suiton -Aqua Vitae
Rank: C
Power: C
Activation Cost: -
Upkeep Cost: 3
Range: self
Speed: -
Element: Suiton
Skill: Medical ninjutsu/ninjutsu
Classification: Personal
Requirements: -
Parent Technique: -
Hand Seals: Ram-Snake-Horse
Description:
After making the appropriate handseals, the user's skin glows slightly as it becomes covered by a thin film of water nature chakra, which allows the user to apply their medical chakra more effectively all over their entire body.

By using this technique, the user can heal any minor first degree burns and other minor second degree effects, such as necrosis, frostbite,bleeding etc. It also allows for the user to heal small scrapes and bruises instantly, with larger wounds and afflictions taking longer, but in general: with enough timethis technique is able to heal even the gravest of wounds.

D Rank and C rank damage: Instant healing
B rank damage: Heals over the span of two posts
A rank damage heals over the span of three posts
S rank damage heals over the span of five posts as long as the user isn't dead.

Weaknesses: Any raiton techniques used on the user of this technique and damage sustained by those techniques during the use of this technique will have their power and damage boosted by +1.

Name: Suiton - Sniper Needle Shot
Rank: C
Power: D
Activation Cost: 5
Upkeep Cost: -
Range: 25m
Speed: B
Element: Suiton
Skill: Ninjutsu
Classification: Secret
Requirements: C rank perception
Parent Technique: -
Hand Seals: Ram-snake-dog
Description:
When the user has made the handseals Ram-snake-dog, they turn any moisture in the air around them or from a water source nearby into a double dozen of three inch long needles made out of a mix of water for substance and chakra to create and hold form.

With a single wave of their hand, they can launch these needles with pinpoint precision towards anyone at an amazing speed. Though the needles themselves will never puncture further than 1 cm into exposed flesh, it is the sheer amount that makes this technique so dangerous. That paired with the fact that due to the speed of this technique, it hardly makes any sound, so to avoid or properly defend against it, the target needs to have either a perception or a coordination of B rank or higher.

Any armor of C rank or higher will completely ignore this technique (it won't be damaged by this technique even when hit.) however this only counts for bodyparts covered by said armor and not the technique in general.

Weaknesses: Can't be used in arid areas, can only be used when Silence is Golden is activated.

Name: Suiton - Hyper Needle Shot
Rank: B
Power: C
Activation Cost: 10
Upkeep Cost: -
Range: 50m
Speed: A
Element: Suiton
Skill: Ninjutsu
Classification: Secret
Requirements: B rank perception
Parent Technique: Sniper needle shot
Hand Seals: Ram-snake-dog-rat
Description:
When the user has made the handseals Ram-snake-dog-rat, they turn any moisture in the air around them or from a water source nearby into three dozen of three inch long needles made out of a mix of water for substance and chakra to create and hold form.

With a single wave of their hand, they can launch these needles with pinpoint precision towards anyone at an amazing speed. Though the needles themselves will never puncture further than 2 cm into exposed flesh, it is the sheer amount that makes this technique so dangerous. That paired with the fact that due to the speed of this technique, it hardly makes any sound, so to avoid or properly defend against it, the target needs to have either a perception or a coordination of A rank or higher.

Any armor of B rank or higher will completely ignore this technique (it won't be damaged by this technique even when hit.) however this only counts for bodyparts covered by said armor and not the technique in general.

Weaknesses: Can't be used in arid areas, can only be used when Silence is Golden is activated.

Name: Assassin Technique - Perfect Vision
Rank: C
Power: -
Activation Cost: -
Upkeep Cost: 3
Range: Self
Speed: -
Element: -
Skill: Ijutsu
Classification: Secret
Requirements: -
Parent Technique: -
Hand Seals: Yin - Snake
Description:
After making the handseals Yin- Snake, the user of this technique touches their eyelids with their fingers, attaching a bit of chakra to them and after blinking once, the chakra will act as a magnifier for their eyes, also adjusting their eyes with medical chakra to this new acquired level of sight by relieving the eyes from any strain on them when looking too long through these focused lenses made out of chakra.

While using this technique, the user's perception increases by +1.

Weaknesses: -

Name: Suiton -Aqua Vitae
Rank: C
Power: C
Activation Cost: -
Upkeep Cost: 3
Range: self
Speed: -
Element: Suiton
Skill: Medical ninjutsu/ninjutsu
Classification: Personal
Requirements: -
Parent Technique: -
Hand Seals: Ram-Snake-Horse
Description:
After making the appropriate handseals, the user's skin glows slightly as it becomes covered by a thin film of water nature chakra, which allows the user to apply their medical chakra more effectively all over their entire body.

By using this technique, the user can heal any minor first degree burns and other minor second degree effects, such as necrosis, frostbite,bleeding etc. It also allows for the user to heal small scrapes and bruises instantly, with larger wounds and afflictions taking longer, but in general: with enough timethis technique is able to heal even the gravest of wounds.

D Rank and C rank damage: Instant healing
B rank damage: Heals over the span of two posts
A rank damage heals over the span of three posts
S rank damage heals over the span of five posts as long as the user isn't dead.

Weaknesses: Any raiton techniques used on the user of this technique and damage sustained by those techniques during the use of this technique will have their power and damage boosted by +1.

Mystical Healing Palm is an A rank medical ninjutsu explicitly meant for healing. This does pretty much the same thing, just with water and in some cases quicker. Gonna need to make it at least equal in rank and cost to Healing Palm. This includes an activation cost as well as an upkeep.

Name: Suiton - Sniper Needle Shot
Rank: C
Power: D
Activation Cost: 5
Upkeep Cost: -
Range: 25m
Speed: B
Element: Suiton
Skill: Ninjutsu
Classification: Secret
Requirements: C rank perception
Parent Technique: -
Hand Seals: Ram-snake-dog
Description:
When the user has made the handseals Ram-snake-dog, they turn any moisture in the air around them or from a water source nearby into a double dozen of three inch long needles made out of a mix of water for substance and chakra to create and hold form.

With a single wave of their hand, they can launch these needles with pinpoint precision towards anyone at an amazing speed. Though the needles themselves will never puncture further than 1 cm into exposed flesh, it is the sheer amount that makes this technique so dangerous. That paired with the fact that due to the speed of this technique, it hardly makes any sound, so to avoid or properly defend against it, the target needs to have either a perception or a coordination of B rank or higher.

Any armor of C rank or higher will completely ignore this technique (it won't be damaged by this technique even when hit.) however this only counts for bodyparts covered by said armor and not the technique in general.

Weaknesses: Can't be used in arid areas, can only be used when Silence is Golden is activated.

I don't like the absolute stat requirements for dodging this since this technique isn't genjutsu nor does it inflict a stat debuff that would require certain stat ranks, so take those out. It depends on the circumstances whether someone will be able to dodge this or not.

Name: Suiton - Hyper Needle Shot
Rank: B
Power: C
Activation Cost: 10
Upkeep Cost: -
Range: 50m
Speed: A
Element: Suiton
Skill: Ninjutsu
Classification: Secret
Requirements: B rank perception
Parent Technique: Sniper needle shot
Hand Seals: Ram-snake-dog-rat
Description:
When the user has made the handseals Ram-snake-dog-rat, they turn any moisture in the air around them or from a water source nearby into three dozen of three inch long needles made out of a mix of water for substance and chakra to create and hold form.

With a single wave of their hand, they can launch these needles with pinpoint precision towards anyone at an amazing speed. Though the needles themselves will never puncture further than 2 cm into exposed flesh, it is the sheer amount that makes this technique so dangerous. That paired with the fact that due to the speed of this technique, it hardly makes any sound, so to avoid or properly defend against it, the target needs to have either a perception or a coordination of A rank or higher.

Any armor of B rank or higher will completely ignore this technique (it won't be damaged by this technique even when hit.) however this only counts for bodyparts covered by said armor and not the technique in general.

Weaknesses: Can't be used in arid areas, can only be used when Silence is Golden is activated.

Same concerns as the parent technique to this one.




On Perfect Vision, do you mean you get one plus or one tier for the boost? If it's one plus, you can get away with an E rank cost and upkeep. If it's one tier, you'll need an activation cost on top of the 3 point upkeep.

Name: Suiton -Aqua Vitae
Rank: B
Power: A
Activation Cost: 10
Upkeep Cost: 5
Range: self
Speed: -
Element: Suiton
Skill: Medical ninjutsu/ninjutsu
Classification: Personal
Requirements: -
Parent Technique: -
Hand Seals: Ram-Snake-Horse
Description:
After making the appropriate handseals, the user's skin glows slightly as it becomes covered by a thin film of water nature chakra, which allows the user to apply their medical chakra more effectively all over their entire body.

By using this technique, the user can heal any minor first degree burns and other minor second degree effects, such as necrosis, frostbite,bleeding etc. It also allows for the user to heal small scrapes and bruises instantly, with larger wounds and afflictions taking longer, but in general: with enough timethis technique is able to heal even the gravest of wounds.

D Rank and C rank damage: Instant healing
B rank damage: Heals over the span of one posts
A rank damage heals over the span of two posts
S rank damage heals over the span of four posts as long as the user isn't dead.

Weaknesses: Any raiton techniques used on the user of this technique and damage sustained by those techniques during the use of this technique will have their power and damage boosted by +1 rank.

Name: Suiton - Sniper Needle Shot
Rank: C
Power: D
Activation Cost: 5
Upkeep Cost: -
Range: 25m
Speed: B
Element: Suiton
Skill: Ninjutsu
Classification: Secret
Requirements: C rank perception
Parent Technique: -
Hand Seals: Ram-snake-dog
Description:
When the user has made the handseals Ram-snake-dog, they turn any moisture in the air around them or from a water source nearby into a double dozen of three inch long needles made out of a mix of water for substance and chakra to create and hold form.

With a single wave of their hand, they can launch these needles with pinpoint precision towards anyone at an amazing speed. Though the needles themselves will never puncture further than 1 cm into exposed flesh, it is the sheer amount that makes this technique so dangerous. That paired with the fact that due to the speed of this technique, it hardly makes any sound, so it's a hard technique to avoid or to properly defend against.

Any armor of C rank or higher will completely ignore this technique (it won't be damaged by this technique even when hit.) however this only counts for bodyparts covered by said armor and not the technique in general.

Weaknesses: Can't be used in arid areas, can only be used when Silence is Golden is activated.

Name: Suiton - Hyper Needle Shot
Rank: B
Power: C
Activation Cost: 10
Upkeep Cost: -
Range: 50m
Speed: A
Element: Suiton
Skill: Ninjutsu
Classification: Secret
Requirements: B rank perception
Parent Technique: Sniper needle shot
Hand Seals: Ram-snake-dog-rat
Description:
When the user has made the handseals Ram-snake-dog-rat, they turn any moisture in the air around them or from a water source nearby into three dozen of three inch long needles made out of a mix of water for substance and chakra to create and hold form.

With a single wave of their hand, they can launch these needles with pinpoint precision towards anyone at an amazing speed. Though the needles themselves will never puncture further than 2 cm into exposed flesh, it is the sheer amount that makes this technique so dangerous. That paired with the fact that due to the speed of this technique, it hardly makes any sound, so it's a hard technique to avoid or to properly defend against.

Any armor of B rank or higher will completely ignore this technique (it won't be damaged by this technique even when hit.) however this only counts for bodyparts covered by said armor and not the technique in general.

Weaknesses: Can't be used in arid areas, can only be used when Silence is Golden is activated.

Name: Assassin Technique - Perfect Vision
Rank: C
Power: -
Activation Cost: 5
Upkeep Cost: 1
Range: Self
Speed: -
Element: -
Skill: Ijutsu
Classification: Secret
Requirements: -
Parent Technique: -
Hand Seals: Yin - Snake
Description:
After making the handseals Yin- Snake, the user of this technique touches their eyelids with their fingers, attaching a bit of chakra to them and after blinking once, the chakra will act as a magnifier for their eyes, also adjusting their eyes with medical chakra to this new acquired level of sight by relieving the eyes from any strain on them when looking too long through these focused lenses made out of chakra.

While using this technique, the user's perception increases by +1 tier.

Weaknesses: Bright lights such as flashbangs may cause temporary blindness and instead lower the user's perception by -1 for a post (or as long as the bright light remains active when using this technique)

Edits made:

Aqua Vitae: Mystical palm is a B rank Technique with A rank power, which states that it can heal a FATAL wound in 3 posts, which I assume is high level A to S rank (hence the if you aren't dead clausule in my technique) I gave it a B rank base activation cost and an equal upkeep cost as Mystical palm, weakness remains but due to it now being a B rank, I did lower the amount of posts it takes to heal with 1 post for each rank.

Sniper/hyper needle: Adjusted the "hard rank requirements" to a more elusive gesture that proper rp will be needed to defend or avoid rather than a set rank of stat. Armor weaknesses remain.

Perfect vision: Added a Activation cost, also added a significant weakness similar, yet worse than Nozomi's oculus enhancement, though also lowered the upkeep cost because of the fact that an activation cost was added and a weakness has been added. als +1 always means a full tier/rank, other wise it would say '+' or '++' as mentioned in the site rules.

Spoiler:

Approved



Aqua: Mmmmmmmmmm, looking at it as is I feel like an extra two points of upkeep would be appropriate. Your points on Mystical Healing Palm are correct, but Mystical Healing Palm is used on a stationary target and requires the medical shinobi to be focusing actively on healing the patient. This is something you just generate that heals passively and even while you're fighting, so even if it doesn't heal fatal wounds as quickly it has much more versatility. The lower level wounds are healed just as fast, if not quicker that Mystical Healing Palm, since B and A rank wounds can also be fatal. Hell, C rank wounds can be fatal depending on where they are. Fatal isn't necessarily determined by rank.



Assassins: Nozomi's technique blinds her against bright things. Regardless of Perception level, blind is blind. Yours just lowers Perception by one tier, indicating that you can still perceive what's happening. That is not worse by any means. Yours is also more complex, involving the usage of medical ninjutsu whereas hers is just a film of water essentially. Either be blinded by bright things, like Nozomi's, or up the upkeep to 3.

You missed the point with the assassin thing: it's blind AND perception debuff, perception isn't only sight, but all senses. I lower perception as well due to the distraction the blindness will no doubt cause

Halcyon Yomi wrote:You missed the point with the assassin thing: it's blind AND perception debuff, perception isn't only sight, but all senses. I lower perception as well due to the distraction the blindness will no doubt cause

Adding in random effects that don't have anything to do with the technique doesn't balance it, and this goes for any future techniques of yours. A bright light is not going to make you go deaf or lose the ability to smell things as all sensory input makes up your perception. The wording chosen, "instead", made it seem as though this temporary blindness only gives you one tier of perception loss to me whereas blindness is a complete absence of visual perception with the rest of your perception not being affected. Sorry for the misunderstanding, but please change that wording to avoid any complaints by others in a potential fight later on down the road. This technique has to do with a specific portion of perception, your vision, which is why I said to just make it blindness. A bright light can blind you temporarily, and will if you're augmenting your natural vision. The only weakness you need is that it blinds you when bright light hits your eyes, so you can keep that tier debuff if you like but it's not necessary as long as there is blindness. Still need to make the changes on Aqua, too.

Name: Assassin Technique - Perfect Vision
Rank: C
Power: -
Activation Cost: 3
Upkeep Cost: 1
Range: Self
Speed: -
Element: -
Skill: Ijutsu
Classification: Secret
Requirements: -
Parent Technique: -
Hand Seals: Yin - Snake
Description:
After making the handseals Yin- Snake, the user of this technique touches their eyelids with their fingers, attaching a bit of chakra to them and after blinking once, the chakra will act as a magnifier for their eyes, also adjusting their eyes with medical chakra to this new acquired level of sight by relieving the eyes from any strain on them when looking too long through these focused lenses made out of chakra.

While using this technique, the user's perception increases by +1 tier.

Weaknesses: Any sort of extreme change in lighting (be it sudden darkness or sudden bright light depending on time and place of usage) will in stead lower both perception and coordination with -- for one post after the occurance of said change of lighting.

Halcyon Yomi wrote:Name: Assassin Technique - Perfect Vision
Rank: C
Power: -
Activation Cost: 5
Upkeep Cost: 1
Range: Self
Speed: -
Element: -
Skill: Ijutsu
Classification: Secret
Requirements: -
Parent Technique: -
Hand Seals: Yin - Snake
Description:
After making the handseals Yin- Snake, the user of this technique touches their eyelids with their fingers, attaching a bit of chakra to them and after blinking once, the chakra will act as a magnifier for their eyes, also adjusting their eyes with medical chakra to this new acquired level of sight by relieving the eyes from any strain on them when looking too long through these focused lenses made out of chakra.

While using this technique, the user's perception increases by +1 tier.

Weaknesses: Bright lights such as flashbangs may cause temporary blindness (1 post) and lower the user's coordination by - for a post (or as long as the bright light remains active when using this technique)

Change the upkeep to 3 CP and you'll be gucci

isn't that a bit unfair, given that nozomi's ocular enhancement also has 5/1 and doesn't have that many weaknesses?

I have pulled Nozomi's technique for review, but I will tell you mostly the same thing:


The weakness needs stronger parameters for it to be passable. A flash bomb, or any form of light equal to that strength will blind anybody regardless. Here is the revised suggestion for the technique:

"When in brightly lit spaces or experiencing a sudden shifts of light (such as those caused by flash bombs, combustion, or explosions) the positives of the technique becomes negatives for one post after the events have ceased."

This is to simulate the effects of, for example, coming inside a dark house after spending hours outside midday in summer, or staring at your phone in your room at night and then turning the screen off, however on a greatly more amplified level. This edit makes you also susceptible to bright spaces in general as well as defines the consequences of the drawback and gives it a length of time it will affect you as the user.


If you have any questions or concerns regarding your technique, feel free to contact me.