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    Post by Makoto Mon Oct 09, 2017 12:17 am

    Name: Weed
    Rank: B
    Price: 25k
    Symptoms: The user of the drug smokes the product. From there its as if the world slows down from them and they can truly focus into whatever they put their mind to. The user's eyes become bloodshot although their personality becomes a mellow type. They dont care about much if it doesnt have to do what with they are focused on. Sometimes the user hallucinates but this isn't common.
    Effects: This drug allows the user to have complete focus into whatever they are focusing on. This boosts the user's intelligence by one full tier.
    Drawbacks: Seeing that the user is focused in on one thing this brings their coordination down by a full tier.
    Countdown: Takes 3 full post after inhaling the drug to take effect. Enjoy the blunt.
    Duration: This Drug lasts 6 posts.
    Cooldown: 15 Posts to get back to normal.


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    Post by Rin Matoi Mon Oct 09, 2017 12:56 am

    Makoto wrote:Name: Weed
    Rank: B
    Price: 25k
    Symptoms: The user of the drug smokes the product. From there its as if the world slows down from them and they can truly focus into whatever they put their mind to. The user's eyes become bloodshot although their personality becomes a mellow type. They dont care about much if it doesnt have to do what with they are focused on. Sometimes the user hallucinates but this isn't common.
    Effects: This drug allows the user to have complete focus into whatever they are focusing on. This boosts the user's intelligence by one full tier.
    Drawbacks: Seeing that the user is focused in on one thing this brings their coordination down by a full tier.
    Countdown: Takes 3 full post after inhaling the drug to take effect. Enjoy the blunt.
    Duration: This Drug lasts 6 posts.
    Cooldown: 15 Posts to get back to normal.

    Approoooovved
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    Post by Makoto Mon Oct 16, 2017 11:07 am

    Name: Cocaine (Snort)
    Rank: A
    Price: 35,000
    Symptoms: Dilated pupils
    Runny nose (snorting)
    Nosebleeds (snorting)
    Fast heart rate
    Overconfidence
    Unusual excitement
    Aggressiveness
    Paranoia
    Poor judgment
    Effects: This drug is snorted through the nose. This affects the user's speed by 2 full tiers.
    Drawbacks: This side effects for this drug are fairly heavy.
    Due to Overconfidence, Parnoia, and Poor Judgment an User's Intellegence is decreased by 1 full tier
    Countdown: 3 Posts to affect the user .
    Duration: 10 posts
    Cooldown: 22 posts


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    Post by Rin Matoi Mon Oct 16, 2017 3:46 pm

    Makoto wrote:Name: Cocaine (Snort)
    Rank: A
    Price: 50,000
    Symptoms: Dilated pupils
    Runny nose (snorting)
    Nosebleeds (snorting)
    Fast heart rate
    Overconfidence
    Unusual excitement
    Aggressiveness
    Paranoia
    Poor judgment
    Effects: This drug is snorted through the nose. This affects the user's speed by 2 full tiers.
    Drawbacks: This side effects for this drug are fairly heavy. You have 2 choices as far as drawbacks go.
    1)Due to Overconfidence, Parnoia, and Poor Judgment an User's Intellegence is decrease by 2 tiers.
    2) Do to an faster heartrate and nosebleeds an user will take a tier decrease to both Constitution and strength by one tier.
    Countdown: 3 Posts to affect the user .
    Duration: 10 posts
    Cooldown: 22 posts

    The drawback should be static. Letting the user choose the drawback for a drug seems faulty. Also, these drawbacks are too harsh. You could get away with a single tier debuff. No need to drop two tiers. You can keep the -2 tier drawback if you like, and in turn that'll make your drug cheaper to produce (I'll let it slide with 35,000 ryo.) However you must choose a single drawback that will effect the user.
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    Post by Makoto Mon Oct 16, 2017 10:48 pm

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    Post by Rin Matoi Sat Oct 21, 2017 3:41 pm

    Makoto wrote:Name: Cocaine (Snort)
    Rank: A
    Price: 35,000
    Symptoms: Dilated pupils
    Runny nose (snorting)
    Nosebleeds (snorting)
    Fast heart rate
    Overconfidence
    Unusual excitement
    Aggressiveness
    Paranoia
    Poor judgment
    Effects: This drug is snorted through the nose. This affects the user's speed by 2 full tiers.
    Drawbacks: This side effects for this drug are fairly heavy.
    Due to Overconfidence, Parnoia, and Poor Judgment an User's Intellegence is decreased by 1 full tier
    Countdown: 3 Posts to affect the user .
    Duration: 10 posts
    Cooldown: 22 posts


    In my other post I stated you can either: Keep the loss of two tiers in the drawback and thus have a cheaper drug to produce OR only set it to a loss of one tier in the drawback and keep the price the same. Not set it to a loss of one tier and make it cheaper.

    You can choose one or the other. Fix this and you will be approved.

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