Asura (COM)

Name: Asura
Age: 25
Gender: Male
Village: Sunakagure
Rank: Jounin
Title:

Clan: Hayami
Bloodline: Swift Release
Element(s): Wind
Skill(s):
Taijutsu
Genjutsu
Chemistry

Stats

• Strength: D
  
• Constitution: C
  
• Stamina: C
  
• Speed: B
  
• Coordination: C
  
• Intelligence: B
  
• Perception: C
  

Experience:
1050 Starter
3000 Jounin
0500 Skill Point Traded
0350 UA
4900 Total Exp

1900 B Ranks
1800 C Ranks
0190 D Rank Strength and Hayami tax
1000 Swift Release
4890

Leftover: 10/3850


Unique Abilities:

Poison Specialist: As most of his missions require him to kill people, Asura has spent most of his chemistry time making things to hurt rather than heal.  This has led to him being better with poisons, granting him a one tier boost to all poisons he makes.  This comes at the cost of all poisons made this way having 0.5 of the higher ranks cooldown added to the cooldown of the poison.  
If a C-rank poison was made with B-Rank strength, you would add half of the B-Rank Cooldown to the C-Rank cooldown.

Chemical Enhancement: Asura recently experimented with using chemicals to augment his training, and it went surprisingly well.  That is, until he had been using them for about a week.  WHile they had sped up the growth of his abilities, they had one nasty side effect.  Now that he isn't using them his training is less effective, requiring him to train the drug out of his system.  Gives an Exp boost of 350 At creation, but a debt of 525 that all  experience earned will go to until it has been paid off.

Appearance:
6 feet 1 inch tall

History: Asura was born to the leader of the Hayami clan in Sunagakure, and named for the reputation of his mother.  She was a rather well-known member of the village, mostly for her temper.  While she did have a temper that got her into a lot of trouble, she also cared for her family, and did anything that she had to do to protect them.  While this didn't mean much in the way of her powerful husband, it meant she had her work cut out for her with Asura.  He simply couldn't seem to stop getting into fights, and always enjoyed finding out what made people angry.  It didn't take long for his father to find out that he was a twisted and sadistic little bastard, but his mother refused to see it in her child.  Because of this, she didn't see that most of the fights were started by him, she didn't realize that he never got hurt because he was the one doing the hurting.  Even when he didn't physically combat his peers, he would psychologically torment them, the most extreme case of this occuring in the ninja academy.

Asura wasn't too great in the academy, but he did have a knack for chemicals and a surprising level of speed and stealth, even for a Hayami.  This let him easily slip a few mind altering drugs into his classmates drink during their lunch break.  This made him loopy enough for Asura to .  After this, he began targeting the boy relentlessly with different forms of mayhem.  He would begin with small things, like opening doors the boy closed and switching on lights he had turned off.  These would slowly progess into larger things, voices, crashes, he would break things while he slept to make the boy think he was sleep walking.  After this began to snowball, the boy ended up having a nervous breakdown and going nuts for real.  This ended up with him being locked away, all the while the real maniac laughed behind a closed door.

Soon Asura became older, and he learned to make people do things he wanted without actually making them do it.  He studied people and the way they reacted to different situations, seeing how they would deal with problems.  This made it to where it was much easier for him to manipulate people, usually using his now-superior intellect to trick them into believing everything was their idea.  After a bit of practice on his peers with this, he began attempting to manipulate his superiors into doing things, until it got a bit out of hand.  He ended up being confronted by a his father, who took him to a rather uncomfortable interrogation room.  After a few hours of sitting alone, Asura had figured out where he was.  After retracing the steps and turns he had felt on the way over (he had been blindfolded) he figured out that he was near the Kage building, maybe next door or even in some secret room there.  Eventually, a new person entered into the room, the Kazekage.  After a short conversation with Asura, he was promoted to Jounin and released, under the conditions that he behave and serve the village, or more specifically, the Kage, faithfully.

Within a year both of Asura's parents were dead, killed together on an unfortunate mission, leaving him their home to live in alone.  He now lives there off of the money he makes from his missions, along with some for his work with Chemicals.

(have permission from Kage to put him in meh backstory like this)

Personality: Asura is a much simpler person than most, he enjoys two things greatly.  Having fun, and hurting others.  Usually, the two will coincide for him, as pain tends to be fun, whether he is receiving it or inflicting it.  The only thing he truly hates is boredom, as it stretches seconds of inactivity into an eternal abyss of nothingness.  Apart from these, he likes apples, chemistry, music, and variety.  He dislikes oranges (hates the texture), boring people, silence, and monotony.

The way he acts is less simple, as he is clinically insane, but some sort of pattern can still be percieved by one who knows him well enough.  Although his mood swings seem completely random, they are based on his environment and those in it.  If he likes the crowd near him, he will grow more excited, laughing and often wanting to do some sort of physical activity such as jumping off of a building or killing people with them.  If he is near people or things he doesn't like, he will grow more excited and violent, with sudden, erratic movements and shouting, often evolving into violence.  No matter who he is near he will appear happy, smiling and laughing.  The only time he will fully detach from this pattern is when he has one of his rare bouts of sanity, in which he will think as a normal person would, with real emotions and attachments, as well as true anger and hatred.  These are when he is truly dangerous, as there is nothing more dangerous than the emotions of a sane man.


Roleplay Sample:

Spoiler:

Poison Specialist: As most of his missions require him to kill people, Asura has spent most of his chemistry time making things to hurt rather than heal. This has led to him being better with poisons, granting him a one tier boost to all poisons he makes. This comes at the cost of any medical items being one tier lower.

I would like to see the Flaw of your Unique Ability to impact you more directly. To me, you can simply avoid making "medical items" as if you never had intentions to make them.


My solution is to have your countdown time increased by half the strength of the medicine's rank it's imitating. So for example: You made a C-rank poison that has B-rank strength. So your poison will have the B-rank's countdown, but increased by .5. So you'll be looking at 8 - 15 posts for a cooldown instead of 5 - 10.

Chemical Enhancement: Asura recently experimented with using chemicals to augment his training, and it went surprisingly well. That is, until he had been using them for about a week. WHile they had sped up the growth of his abilities, they had one nasty side effect. Now that he isn't using them his training is less effective, requiring him to train the drug out of his system. Gives an Exp boost of 425 At creation, but a debt of 650 that half of all experience earned will go to until it has been paid off.

UAs that grant bonus EXP such as this one requires you to pay off your debt before accumulating EXP. So that would mean you would have to pay the 650 in full before you could acquire anymore EXP for yourself, instead of only having 50% of earned EXP go towards the debt while keeping the other 50%.


Lastly, the EXP costs for Hayami are only 25% higher. This would be an additional 40 EXP tagged onto the 150 EXP required for normal people (percentages will be rounded to the nearest 5th, so in this case 37.5 turns into 40) meaning you will only need 190 EXP to hit D-tier Strength, not 262.5.


By any means, if you want to try a different idea for any UA, feel free to test them out and I will decide whether they are balanced or not.

Fixed

"Leftover: 12.5/3925"


Edit this to match your changes and you will be approved

Finished

Asura wrote:Name: Asura
Age: 25
Gender: Male
Village: Sunakagure
Rank: Jounin
Title:

Clan: Hayami
Bloodline: Swift Release
Element(s): Wind
Skill(s):
Taijutsu
Genjutsu
Chemistry

Stats

• Strength: D
  
• Constitution: C
  
• Stamina: C
  
• Speed: B
  
• Coordination: C
  
• Intelligence: B
  
• Perception: C
  

Experience:
1050 Starter
3000 Jounin
0500 Skill Point Traded
0350 UA
4900 Total Exp

1900 B Ranks
1800 C Ranks
0190 D Rank Strength and Hayami tax
1000 Swift Release
4890

Leftover: 10/3850


Unique Abilities:

Poison Specialist: As most of his missions require him to kill people, Asura has spent most of his chemistry time making things to hurt rather than heal.  This has led to him being better with poisons, granting him a one tier boost to all poisons he makes.  This comes at the cost of all poisons made this way having 0.5 of the higher ranks cooldown added to the cooldown of the poison.  
If a C-rank poison was made with B-Rank strength, you would add half of the B-Rank Cooldown to the C-Rank cooldown.

Chemical Enhancement: Asura recently experimented with using chemicals to augment his training, and it went surprisingly well.  That is, until he had been using them for about a week.  WHile they had sped up the growth of his abilities, they had one nasty side effect.  Now that he isn't using them his training is less effective, requiring him to train the drug out of his system.  Gives an Exp boost of 350 At creation, but a debt of 525 that all  experience earned will go to until it has been paid off.

Appearance:
6 feet 1 inch tall

History: Asura was born to the leader of the Hayami clan in Sunagakure, and named for the reputation of his mother.  She was a rather well-known member of the village, mostly for her temper.  While she did have a temper that got her into a lot of trouble, she also cared for her family, and did anything that she had to do to protect them.  While this didn't mean much in the way of her powerful husband, it meant she had her work cut out for her with Asura.  He simply couldn't seem to stop getting into fights, and always enjoyed finding out what made people angry.  It didn't take long for his father to find out that he was a twisted and sadistic little bastard, but his mother refused to see it in her child.  Because of this, she didn't see that most of the fights were started by him, she didn't realize that he never got hurt because he was the one doing the hurting.  Even when he didn't physically combat his peers, he would psychologically torment them, the most extreme case of this occuring in the ninja academy.

Asura wasn't too great in the academy, but he did have a knack for chemicals and a surprising level of speed and stealth, even for a Hayami.  This let him easily slip a few mind altering drugs into his classmates drink during their lunch break.  This made him loopy enough for Asura to .  After this, he began targeting the boy relentlessly with different forms of mayhem.  He would begin with small things, like opening doors the boy closed and switching on lights he had turned off.  These would slowly progess into larger things, voices, crashes, he would break things while he slept to make the boy think he was sleep walking.  After this began to snowball, the boy ended up having a nervous breakdown and going nuts for real.  This ended up with him being locked away, all the while the real maniac laughed behind a closed door.

Soon Asura became older, and he learned to make people do things he wanted without actually making them do it.  He studied people and the way they reacted to different situations, seeing how they would deal with problems.  This made it to where it was much easier for him to manipulate people, usually using his now-superior intellect to trick them into believing everything was their idea.  After a bit of practice on his peers with this, he began attempting to manipulate his superiors into doing things, until it got a bit out of hand.  He ended up being confronted by a his father, who took him to a rather uncomfortable interrogation room.  After a few hours of sitting alone, Asura had figured out where he was.  After retracing the steps and turns he had felt on the way over (he had been blindfolded) he figured out that he was near the Kage building, maybe next door or even in some secret room there.  Eventually, a new person entered into the room, the Kazekage.  After a short conversation with Asura, he was promoted to Jounin and released, under the conditions that he behave and serve the village, or more specifically, the Kage, faithfully.

Within a year both of Asura's parents were dead, killed together on an unfortunate mission, leaving him their home to live in alone.  He now lives there off of the money he makes from his missions, along with some for his work with Chemicals.

(have permission from Kage to put him in meh backstory like this)

Personality: Asura is a much simpler person than most, he enjoys two things greatly.  Having fun, and hurting others.  Usually, the two will coincide for him, as pain tends to be fun, whether he is receiving it or inflicting it.  The only thing he truly hates is boredom, as it stretches seconds of inactivity into an eternal abyss of nothingness.  Apart from these, he likes apples, chemistry, music, and variety.  He dislikes oranges (hates the texture), boring people, silence, and monotony.

The way he acts is less simple, as he is clinically insane, but some sort of pattern can still be percieved by one who knows him well enough.  Although his mood swings seem completely random, they are based on his environment and those in it.  If he likes the crowd near him, he will grow more excited, laughing and often wanting to do some sort of physical activity such as jumping off of a building or killing people with them.  If he is near people or things he doesn't like, he will grow more excited and violent, with sudden, erratic movements and shouting, often evolving into violence.  No matter who he is near he will appear happy, smiling and laughing.  The only time he will fully detach from this pattern is when he has one of his rare bouts of sanity, in which he will think as a normal person would, with real emotions and attachments, as well as true anger and hatred.  These are when he is truly dangerous, as there is nothing more dangerous than the emotions of a sane man.


Roleplay Sample:

Spoiler:

Approooooved~